Date: December 02, 2017 9:42 pm Title: O Where, o Where Has My Dear Spencer Gone?
Saw this over on FF and was so immediately fascinated by the summary that I came straight here in the hopes that you'd gotten further along with your originally intended audience. But alas. I cannot tell you how much I am enjoying this. I haven't seen such an original and creative premise for a fic in a long time. Lassiter and Shawn are both perfectly in character (well, I might say that Shawn seems a little more annoying than usual, but that could be because I'm seeing him through Lassie's POV. Still, maybe something to consider) and the plot is moving along smoothly. You had every reason to be so excited about sharing these first few chapters and I really hope you continue soon!
Author's Response: Aww, thank you! =D Yeah, finding the balance for Shawn's voice has been hard, because in the beginning of the show Shawn really *is* annoying but he gets more mature as the show progresses so I have a hard time trying to find the right sound for him. Also, if Shawn weren't a bit more annoying the story wouldn't be as much fun! XD I'm so glad you're enjoying it and I hope I can write more once the holidays are over! ^^
Date: July 02, 2017 10:08 pm Title: O Where, o Where Has My Dear Spencer Gone?
You should be proud of how you handled this. A lot *did* happen---the story is moving forward, and that's what counts. You've got exposition, character development, and the set stage for the next scene. Good job.
Also, I love the fight for control over the coffee. Poor Lassie. He's acting like a crazy person and nobody understands. :-D
Author's Response: Thanks! ^^ I'm actually very, very proud about the coffee scene. It seems like I'm just having a bit of fun (which I am!) but the scene actually kinda comes into play later. I'm very satisfied how it's both actually important AND just fun at the same time. :) I'm usually just bad at that sort of thing~
Date: July 02, 2017 10:04 pm Title: Freaky Thursday, Sans Fortune Cookie
I LOVE THAT ENTIRE LAST SECTION. Such a big stupid grin on my face!
The banter is 100% perfect. Shawn's proof for Lassiter about poor Gus is 100% perfect, too!
Lassiter's blanket of tassels comment and the description of his grin at Shawn's reaction is great. The line about Lassie's cell phone having a seizure is an absolutely fantastic description and I wish I'd thought of it first!
And also, I love it that you snuck the fortune cookie in there. Well played, my friend. Well played. :-D
Author's Response: Thank you~! =D The banter was soooooo much fun to write! And like I said earlier, playing Shawn is kinda hard for me because his character is so unique, so I'm really happy you thought it was good! ^^ Haha, the butterflies XD I had a bit of fun with that~ I thought it seemed like a Gus thing. Also the tassels and the raccoon XD I totally ad-libbed that bit. As soon as I wrote Shawn saying that Lassiter couldn't hurt him, I KNEW I had to throw that in XDD (Also, the seizure . . . I may have heard that somewhere before . . . *shifty eyes*) The fortune cookie absolutely must have come in at some point! XD
Date: July 02, 2017 10:01 pm Title: Prologue: Be Careful What You Wish For
Shawn's characterization is just so spot-on in this chapter. This is awesome.
Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked that! I always have a little bit of a hard time writing Shawn because I'm not as clever as he is with words. XP Fairly often I think I just sound stupid~
Date: June 23, 2017 12:50 pm Title: Freaky Thursday, Sans Fortune Cookie
Wow is all I can say, what an amazing idea for a Psych fanfic, I liked that episode of Stargate Atlantis with Rodney, but I like this fic even better. You are giving Shawn an excellent perspective on Lassie seeing thins from his point of view, literally.
I can't wait to read the next chapter to see where you are going to go with this, there all kinds of directions a fic like this could take. Does Shawn still have his powers of observation? How will Lassie react to learning how Shawn's mind works? How will this experience change Lassie's attitude towards Shawn.
Author's Response: Thank you sooooo much! I'm so happy that you actually like it better then the original episode that I don't even know what to do with myself. My hands are just flaping around like two fish out of water, LOL! XD It's so nice to meet another Stargate fan too, I was convinced that nobody would have any clue what I was talking about. XD You wouldn't believe how excited I am for the rest of this fic! There's so much stuff I wanna do with it~ The potential is just through the roof! The episode's lot and the Psych characters just work so well together! =D I really hope you stick around to read the rest and I'm glad you enjoyed what I've got so far! ^^