Date: January 03, 2018 9:18 am Title: Not Another Trunk!
OH I wish I could do visuals as good as you.
Everything was so spot on and the perfect amount of whump was just epic!
HERO Juliet! WOOOT! That was so incredibly cool and suspenseful! I was expecting the latch to open when she flipped it, and when it didn't my heart did flutters and was like, "Oh no!"
So awesome. :D
Date: December 28, 2017 1:16 pm Title: Not Another Trunk!
I was glancing over it for posting for the actual Exchange and was like HOLD UP I GOTTA READ THIS WHOLE THING THIS LOOKS EPIC
And I was right.
And it was.
So are you.
It's super funny even with the content itself, and then it was super suspenseful because, um, well, THINGS.
And Lassie got to be all kick-butt and awesome.
Btw, I love you.
Date: December 28, 2017 9:58 am Title: Not Another Trunk!
I know I said this before, but I feel the need to say it again! XD This was just the perfect blend of everything you need to make a great short story - pacing, humor, action, word choice, detail, and of course, the whump. XD Couldn't live without that bit~! Also, I love that Gus's present is a GameBoy, it just makes me happy!
The way you break up sentences and vary the length is just genius. I know that's a strange thing to point out, but seriously, you've totally got that mastered! XD
Thanks for the great read!
Author's Response: Daaaaaaw!!!! This gave me so much happy warmth!! My favorite writing style is to break up segments that way - make them a little choppy and whatnot. I really appreciate you specifically pointing that out! Thank you so much for this review and I'm so sorry for the late reply!